Woo hoo, it’s Wednesday again! I’ve recovered from my weeks of on-and-off illness (I hope), but now I’m in the thick of mass chauffeuring. Two kids + concerts, recitals, and awards ceremonies? Bring it on.
I’m also still immersed in editing Lower Education. I’m almost done with my first pass-through, and I have 2 added scenes (of 5). I’ll finish the last 3, which are partly done, and then do another sweep of the whole shebang.
Since I’m not doing anything new, I’m back to sharing bits of Lower Education. Ages ago, I polled readers for what they wanted me to post as my last (ha, ha) entry from this work, and everyone wanted to see poor Phin drunk. I thought I’d reward him for suffering through that humiliation and for letting me be a little mean to him in his interview last week. This is also a reward for those who requested a steamy scene. ♥
My WIP math is boring: It’s the 28th, so 2 + 8 = 10 for 10 short sentences.
Phin leaned down along Alex’s back. “Tell me,” he breathed. “Tell me what you want.”
Alex twisted around a little and they locked eyes. “No,” he answered.
Sucking in his breath, Phin pushed himself up a little. “Please,” he begged. “Let me make you feel good.”
“No,” Alex repeated. “Make us feel good.”
Many thanks to K. L. Schwengel for keeping us all in line. Add your own post here, and be sure to read the other entries. Happy WIP’ing!
Ngaaaaah.
I like to hope that was the reaction I was going for. 😉
Know what my reaction is? “It’s too short.”
No double entendre intended, or insults to characters implied. 🙂
“That’s what he said.”
Gosh that is steamy stuff!! *fans face* All the best with it Amy, hope you can get it how you want it. 🙂
I think it came out well. My goal was to achieve steamy without being smutty or using painfully awkward euphemisms. I think I managed that. 🙂
Yes, you certainly did. 🙂
Good way of expressing their character differences in a few short paragraphs, Amy. Phin, always focused so on the individual need of the moment, Alex focused in a more encompassing way…
Yup. And Phin’s used to just doing whatever he thinks someone else wants. Alex won’t let him play that game.
It’s a pretty common tactic among self-absorbed people from what I’ve read. Not that they’re consciously being that way… but they’re so concerned about their performance as opposed to just being with their partner lovemaking becomes a stage.
I have a feeling Alex s going to throw Phin for so many loops before they’re done it won’t even be funny after a point. Or should I be rooting for Phin at all?
Definitely root for Phin. Alex is the first person he’s been with in ages who doesn’t also have an agenda. It’s throwing him off, for sure!
I agree with Eden. This scene shows a lot about both of their personalities.
I’m soooo glad that came across! I was afraid it was too subtle.
Haha, what a nice way to reword your character. 🙂 Good luck with all the busyness!
Thanks! 🙂 The end of the busyness is in sight, if only we can make it til then. LOL!
That last line had me going D’aww. I know it’s a steamy scene, but it’s just so sweet.
And on that note, I think it’s time for a cold shower…
No, it’s definitely intended as both hot and very sweet. It hints at something that happens later in the story. 🙂
Nice. 🙂 Very effective for such a short snippet. Good job!
Thanks! 🙂
I like how the scene is hot and then hits a sweet note, so you feel the connection/meaningfulness to it all. Hope you’re all better and that you survive your busy-ness. 🙂
We survived week one of the crazy! LOL
Thanks. Yes, that’s exactly what I was going for—hot, but sweet. Seeing how many people picked up on it makes me think I did something right. 🙂
Finally getting around to visiting the WIPpeteers and commenting and…*le sigh* Phin. Yes, that is a very nice scene. A bit short, though. 😉
Finally getting around to replying to the comments (and breathing).
Yeah. Phin. No worries, the actual scene is *much* longer. 😉
I start getting awkward when things get too graphic, but this is just the right amount of steamy!
🙂 Yeah, finding a way to make things hot without being too graphic is challenging. I tend to err on the side of “not enough” because I’m never sure where that line is.