Happy Wednesday! Since last week, auditions and callbacks happened, and both my kids are in their school show. They’re doing High School Musical Junior (shortened version of the full show, meant for kids in grade 9 and below). My 14yo is playing the announcer/narrator, which is perfect for him—the lines read exactly like how my kid sounds on his YouTube channel.
Aside from that, I have a new editing job, and I think I’m finally past my writing woes on this WIP. I still have a bit more to go, but the major issues have been sorted out, I think. Almost time to get beta readers on the job. I have a couple of highly trusted betas, but if anyone else wants in, let me know.
Today’s snippet is a bit more of Cian, and I’m leaving you hanging until next week. This is what I was working on yesterday, so it’s fairly fresh.
WIPmath: 9/27/2017 = 27/9 = 3 paragraphs (Today’s date is really cool because if you add up all the digits, you get 27!)
The whole entire mess at the reception was Cian’s fault. When he looked back on it later, he was never sure whether he should laugh, cry, or be grateful to his own stupidity. In any case, things might have ended up differently if he hadn’t had two shots of Red Bush neat—which he downed entirely too fast on an empty stomach—followed by champagne before and during dinner and the Sam Adams summer ale someone handed him during the father-daughter dance. If he hadn’t been bored while waiting for the wedding party to finish photographs, he never would’ve started. He wasn’t precisely drunk, but he’d lost a good deal of his usual filter in the process.
Cian mostly tuned everything out. Weddings, and wedding receptions, generally bored him. He half wished something exciting like a zombie apocalypse would occur so they could all go home. Consequently, he wasn’t paying enough attention to what or how much he was consuming in the alcohol department. As someone not prone to overdoing it, he missed the cues that he’d already passed that point.
The real trouble didn’t start until after dinner and the customary scheduled festivities.
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Ah, Cian. 😀 Still, he’s Irish-ish, so it’s allowed. I haven’t done that ‘accidentally drunk’ thing in a long, long time. It’s terrible and kind of not terrible all at once. Zombie apocalypse, though…LOL. I love drunk people (in books, not so much in reality). I dread to think what he got up to after dinner etc.
LOL. Well, he is still technically Irish—I had to look that one up. To become a US citizen, you are supposed to “renounce” any other citizenship. (This is for people who don’t naturally have dual citizenship and have to apply here.) However, Ireland does not recognize this practice. So according to his homeland, he’s still one of them. Which I thought was amusing and pretty cool.
Anyway…yeah, I don’t personally enjoy the state of having overdone. In Cian’s situation, it’s going to get real interesting. And that’s all I’ll say. 😉
I cannot wait! Well, I can, and I’ll have to, but not patiently.
Good for Ireland! So it is. 😀
Ha! Not too much longer to wait. 🙂
Ireland’s refusal to recognize when someone has renounced their citizenship struck me as a very, very Irish thing to do.
He half wished something exciting like a zombie apocalypse would occur so they could all go home. <—- Loved this! Oh, Cian. What kind of trouble are you going to get into? 😉
The kind that ends better than it starts. 😉
Okay, so Cian is also at least partially deaf, right? If so, I can completely understand why he would want to have a beer or three, or apparently more given the situation. Even with a hearing aid or aids, things aren’t completely clear with such background noise says my spouse who wears one, and me as well. (I am supposed to have an aid in one ear too–something we’re working on) You simply can’t hear in crowds so you do indeed learn to “tune it out.” If you don’t you’ll drive yourself insane trying to listen and sort the sounds.
So, Cian… I get it, but have you made a mess of things? Looks like you have.
Yes, Cian has significant bilateral hearing loss. And yeah, even with hearing aids, he cannot pick things up properly in a crowded, noisy room. He’s there with other deaf people—both the bride and groom are, as well as many of their friends. But just because they’re conversing in ASL, that doesn’t mean he’s interested in what they’re talking about. So he’s bored, annoyed, and hoping for something interesting. He’s about to get his wish!
Love it!
Oh no Cian! Don’t do it! (But I guess he already did!) I also love the zombie apocalypse part. Looking forward to finding out what happens next?!
That’s great that you’ve sorted out the major problems in this WIP. I would be glad to be a beta-reader, since I’ve been intrigued by your snippets so far! Warning though – I am completely and utterly new to beta-reading, but I will try my best.
LOL! Well, it’s both good and bad, what happens next. But I’m terrible at writing conflict, so I’m definitely hoping my beta readers will have some good suggestions there.
This story definitely requires an open mind. The two fellas are both polyamorous, and Cian is bisexual. Jamie is a former adult film actor with binge eating disorder. Their HEA is more of a “hopefully ever after.” If that doesn’t scare you off and you still want to beta, the link is here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Lq_Ce9ddDtzwzffe4ZG8p5YfRrPTqF29Eg12d0Sf8SQ/edit?usp=sharing
Yay! I am so excited to beta-read your story! Although I enjoy books with characters who are LGBT, this will be my first time reading about a polyamorous MC. I’ve always been curious about how polyamory works 🙂 Let me know if there is a date when I should finish reading your story!
Awesome! I’m hoping to have this ready to go to my publisher by the end of October. After that, I’ll be pretty busy with a new release and stuff at my kids’ school.
Oh dear, this is not going to end well! Though I am kind of looking forward to seeing exactly how it ends badly. I’ve only ever been drunk once and it was kind of a peer pressure-y situation at uni… though at least at someone’s house and I was able to just sleep on the couch, but the negatives outweighed the positives later on.
Ha! Well, it’ll end badly…and then maybe take a turn for the better.
I’ve never been truly drunk, but I’ve had more than I should a couple times by accident. I had a drink in a restaurant that was simply too strong, and once I had a second glass of wine after dinner (that just made me really sleepy, though). I didn’t have any bad effects afterward, but it sure did feel horrible in the moment.